THE FINISED SCRIPT IS EXCELLENT!!!

So for those of you who don't know, the script has been written and is at the following link if you'd like to read it: http://pc.celtx.com/project/WjNMg8vs3P0j/view/http://celtx.com/res/1kEqvojZWTHA

Don't get the wrong end of the stick though, i didn't write it, but i think it is excellently written and i love it!!! If you haven't read it and don't want me to ruin it by commentingon parts you haven't read yet, stop reading NOW



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So i love the dialogue... very nicely written, it is clear the characters are all good friends, some very funny parts too, you gotta love the zombie teenagers!!! Reading through it, i see that the filming of it should be pretty easy, no difficlt scenes, just a few unbusy streets and some appartments should cover it... but there is a few things that i think should be added, just to add to the end of the movie, which (Please don't be insulted Mr. Writer) is lacking, although i like the fact they don't all survive... i think that Ben and Ethan should go out with a bit more of a bang... When the soldier shoots Abbey, and then shuffles off, Ethans reaction is to run to her, and then some zombies arrive... I think as part of Ben's reaction he runs after the soldier and grabs him from behind, the soldier (Startled) squeezs the trigger and shoots several bullets at the floor and one in his own foot, then screams and drops the gun, then Ben punches him repeatedly, until he falls unconcious to the floor, that is when the zombies draw in, so Ben picks up the gun and a few grenade from the soldier, then he runs closer to Ben, picking up Abbey's Mop stick and running to the nearest zombie, sticking it straight through it's heart, which goes to far and goes through another zombie's heart behind it... he then pulls the pin out of his grenades throwing them carelessly into the crowd of zombies and then continues fighting with his metal bar, much like the end the writer proposed, but just with that added mascre of zombies, and also gives more meaning to the soldier who serves little purpose in the movie... and seems to be a random character there for no reason...

ANYWAYS... the only other thing i have to critisize is that you never hear what Angela has to say to Eric, i think maybe that clip should be in the end credits or something...

The thing i love about this script is that A - it makes sense (The zombies are undead so are pretty hard to kill) and B - It isn't like other zombie movies in that the girl isn't the surviver, and the world isn't saved and resored to normal, and i REALLY like the fact there isn't some stupid, overly thought through explination, because in reality, the government just wouldn't let that kind of information get released... So the fact that the lights go out conveniantly before the Zombies break into Eric's flat is a lil farfetched, if there was a way his power could go out, and him saying: "Well, shit..." and then we could show another vlog, or a few clips of zombies stumbling around and killing etc. then cut suddenly back to Erics apartment, only visible by moonlight, with the comotion outside, them coming in, then the cut to black and the excellent last line; Batter up, fuckwads...

And thats about it, i still love the script, i just think if we could make these little changes it would just improve it slightly, but i invite your opinions... cheers!!!

Luvness
Zac

I can guarantee that script is not going to be used.
A better script was written but Bryony has decided to shit on the scriptwriters and go with a version rewritten completely by a single person, going against the premisses of a collaborative project.

You go with this one, I can guarantee the community will regret it.

Bryony posted this one on her IZM youtube account a few days ago, so this must be the one she's using...

Fuzileer wrote:I can guarantee that script is not going to be used.
A better script was written but Bryony has decided to shit on the scriptwriters and go with a version rewritten completely by a single person, going against the premisses of a collaborative project.

You go with this one, I can guarantee the community will regret it.

That is Mitch's script up there, mate - not ours. That's the one Bryony is going to use.
How dare you get confused!

Wow guys, you writers had a deadline! And I got a script by then, which was good, and so I distributed it to the relevant people. Then another one happened, which in my opinion was not as good. As there wasn't enough time to reedit the script, and the script I'd received by the deadline was great, I, uh, went with script 1.

I'm producing a movie, and it needed a script, now I have one! That's kind of the end of it, really. :/ I'm sorry you don't like it and you did work which ultimately didn't get used, but the deadline passed!! And the script we have is GOOD! It blew me away when I read it, it was miles ahead of what I expected.

Paperlilies wrote:Wow guys, you writers had a deadline! And I got a script by then, which was good, and so I distributed it to the relevant people. Then another one happened, which in my opinion was not as good. As there wasn't enough time to reedit the script, and the script I'd received by the deadline was great, I, uh, went with script 1.

I'm producing a movie, and it needed a script, now I have one! That's kind of the end of it, really. :/ I'm sorry you don't like it and you did work which ultimately didn't get used, but the deadline passed!! And the script we have is GOOD! It blew me away when I read it, it was miles ahead of what I expected.

I like it... ii just would have preffered an ending with a bang...

Christ, I really wish some people would pull their heads out of their arses!

If it wasn't for Bryony, this wouldn't even exist. Get over yourselves and accept you can't always have everything you want!

stuclark wrote:
If it wasn't for Bryony, this wouldn't even exist. Get over yourselves and accept you can't always have everything you want!

qft

I agree, i just put forward a suggestion, hoping she would like it and put it in... but ultimatly it's her decision, i understand how much work she's done for this project and that i won't get everything "I want", but to be honest i was just trying to help, incase anyone else agreed that there could be a bit more of a bang at the end... i'm entitled to my opinion, arn't I?

You are entitled to your opinion, however there has been MUCH debate about the ending of the movie alone. (not to forget EVERYTHING else that went into it.)

As far as i know, the ending is staying the same, as you read it now.

Thanks for the info Meg, had no idea there was another thread discussing this stuff, i can never seem to find anything on here...

Well, either way, you did a great job with the script Meg and Team...! Can't wait to see how it all turns out!!!

Luvness
Zac

[quote="Zdecent"]So for those of you who don't know, the script has been written and is at the following link if you'd like to read it: http://pc.celtx.com/project/WjNMg8vs3P0j/view/http://celtx.com/res/1kEqvojZWTHA

Hey dude I have celtx is there anyway I could get a copy of the celtx project?

Will send it to you, as soon as i get home. (at work on a SHIT-TAY laptop.)



It blocks half of this forum site. and i don't know why. (like the admin panel. BAH)